FRIDAY FICTIONEERS- hosted by Rochelle Wisoff
Copyright – Erin Leary
Fiction
Word count- 103
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He is back at this place exactly one year later.
Last year, his wife disappeared without a trace.
He enjoys the fog, warm sunlight, and the water.
He thinks to himself, “If a woman loves a man only for his looks and is foolish enough to leave him all her wealth, then she deserves what happens to her.”
But he is unaware of the bubbles on the water, forming a thick fog-like structure that is slowly approaching him.
Suddenly, he is enveloped in its embrace, feeling suffocated and powerless.
As he loses consciousness, he hears a whisper say, “You also deserve this, my love.”
Sharing Thoughts 
Very well crafted, Indiraji.
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Thanks , you saying this is an honor dear.
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Sweet revenge.
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Thanks for liking.
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Aha!He got his just desserts:-)Well written Indira:-)
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Thanks Atreyee.
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🙂
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Seems they are all a bit deserving.
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You are right. Thanks for your visit.
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Good payback! I’m glad he went there to gloat – serves him right! Thanks, Nan
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Thanks you so much Nan for your visit and comment.
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Karma does payback 🙂
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So true dear. Thanks for your visit and comment.
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Warm Greetings from cold and snowy Poland.
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Thanks Marco, its warm in Visakhapatnam. Hope you are enjoying winter.
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Well, Indira, I can’t think of anything much more spooky than a dead woman pulling a man to his underwater death. At least, that’s what I read/saw!
Good job!
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I don’t know whether ghosts take revenge or not, but I wanted her to do it. Thanks for encouraging. I’ll be more happy if you tell me what I lack in my writing.
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Dear Indira,
He got what he deserved. Good for her ghost. 😉
However you might consider reworking this sentence: ‘if a woman is so madly loves a man for his looks and will her all wealth to him foolishly, she obviously deserved this…’ try something like “if a woman madly loves a man for his looks and is foolish enough to will him all her wealth…” I think it’s a language thing. If I’m overstepping my bounds let me know.
I really love the story line.
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Rochelle dear, I’m very thankful to you for pointing it out. I have some problem with English, if no one tells me what is wrong how can I improve. Thanks a lot for taking time out to read thoroughly. Thanks for encouraging me.
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Aha! Looks like a bad man got what he deserved. That’s just poetic justice. Well done, Indira! Hope to see many more of these from you.
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That is a very encouraging comment. Thanks a lot, coming from a very good writer, its an honor for me.
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great story-telling.
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Thanks dear.
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