rochellewisofffields–What does the photo prompt below say to you? Tell me in a hundred words.
Fiction
word count-101
Revenge
The muck, moss, and pigeon poop on the statue makes me feel sorry for the king whose statue is it.
He must have had a false notion that coming generations would remember and revere him as all arrogant egoists have.
Guide told me how he burdened his subjects with excessive taxes to raise funds for his statue and tortured people who could not pay. Many died of poverty, hard work, and starvation.
I am sure they were reborn as pigeons.
They were taking revenge by pooping on his statue as he could not harm them, except keep glaring at them.
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That is a sweet story indeed
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Thanks.
On Sat, Jul 5, 2014 at 5:27 PM, Indira's Blog wrote:
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Dear Indira,
I love the feeling of poetic justice in this piece. I think you may need an s at the end of generation. It feels awkward as a singular.
Your writing improves with each story you write.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks Rochelle for pointing out the mistake. Your comments are very encouraging. Shalom.
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Poetic justice. I like the concept. 🙂
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Thanks YS.
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Love it! Poetic justice, indeed!
There are a couple minor grammar oops or typos. I agree with Rochelle that the word ‘generation’ in the second sentence could use an ‘s’ at the end; also the way the word ‘fund’ is used in the third sentence it is plural (should be ‘funds’).
On the whole, a delightful use of the prompt.
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Thanks dear. I have corrected it. Very helpful and encouraging comment.
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Amusing post!
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Thanks Shilpa.
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love the life lesson in your wonderful story, Indira. do right the first time around to avoid poop in the next round. 🙂
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Thanks Sun.
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will remember (I think this should be WOULD remember)
This is a delightful revenge story!
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Thanks Alicia.
On Sun, Jul 6, 2014 at 9:39 PM, Indira's Blog wrote:
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hahah… bad for the king, but that’s how life comes in full circle!!
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Yes dear that’s true. Thanks for your visit and comment.
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Nicely done Indira. A nicely administered touch of irony.
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Thanks Sandra.
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Dear Indira, Excellent and the old King ‘Aint what he used to be. He must have been a pompous ass! Too bad, his loyal subjects are tending to him quite well. Eweeeeee! Nan”)
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How true Nan. Thanks for reading and commenting.
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Indira, Good story. I liked the funny idea of the subjects coming back as pigeons. That’s poetic justice. I hope the next king was better. Well written. 🙂 —Susan
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Thanks Susan.
On Tue, Jul 8, 2014 at 12:07 PM, Indira's Blog wrote:
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An interesting story you wrote there, Indira. I’m impressed. As requested by you, hereunder my take at 100 words:
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After winning the bloody Kalinga War, the Maurya Emperor Asoka was devastated by the carnage he wrought. Wrecked by remorse he embraced Buddha’s teachings. But he did something else that poets and scholars overlooked.
‘Raise a statue in my likeness,’ he said. ‘And place it in a spot where animals will defecate on my likeness and the lowliest creepers will violate my body. And this will be just. Let history say, behold the Great Asoka who has humbled himself to such treatment in the public’s eye, as atonement for his terrible sins. That will be my lesson well-learned for eternity.’
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Hope you like it.
Cheers,
Eric
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What a pity, I didn’ know that. You never fail. Loved it. Can i copy it and post it in my blog with you link?
On Thu 15 Mar, 2018, 11:38 AM Indira's Blog, wrote:
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Thank you for your kind words, Indira,
Yes, go ahead and post it on your blog.
All good wishes,
Eric
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Thanks for your story.
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Reblogged this on Indira's Blog and commented:
One comment from my friend Eric Elagan impressed me so much that I’m reblogging my own post with his story so readers can enjoy.
” After winning the bloody Kalinga War, the Maurya Emperor Asoka was devastated by the carnage he wrought. Wrecked by remorse he embraced Buddha’s teachings. But he did something else that poets and scholars overlooked.
‘Raise a statue in my likeness,’ he said. ‘And place it in a spot where animals will defecate on my likeness and the lowliest creepers will violate my body. And this will be just. Let history say, behold the Great Asoka who has humbled himself to such treatment in the public’s eye, as atonement for his terrible sins. That will be my lesson well-learned for eternity.’
–After winning the bloody Kalinga War, the Maurya Emperor Asoka was devastated by the carnage he wrought. Wrecked by remorse he embraced Buddha’s teachings. But he did something else that poets and scholars overlooked.
‘Raise a statue in my likeness,’ he said. ‘And place it in a spot where animals will defecate on my likeness and the lowliest creepers will violate my body. And this will be just. Let history say, behold the Great Asoka who has humbled himself to such treatment in the public’s eye, as atonement for his terrible sins. That will be my lesson well-learned for eternity.’
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