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Friday Fictioneers- 18/7/2014/ OPTIMISM

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Copyright – Adam Ickes

 

Word Count 100

Humor

OPTIMISM

Life can be very boring, sitting the whole day in a corner, watching workers doing their job, even for a stuffed goat.

Do you believe in animism? I do. I have a soul like plants, winds, and mountains. I can’t speak but I can understand everything.

When one day one worker scolded her pretty daughter for not studying properly and failing in the same class again and again that if she fails one more time he will marry her off to me.

Since then life has become a bit interesting. I am waiting for her to fail.

Optimism makes life bearable.

 

The first version of FF

HOPE

I was assigned the most important job in the office to keep watch on fellow workers.

I knew they despised me and whispered to each other, ‘ see that back biter, sitting there a whole day like a stuffed goat, doing nothing and bleating all the time.’

I might have resigned long back but one day I overheard the boss threatening that pretty worker, ‘ look you silly goat! You make too many mistakes. One more mistake and I will make you marry that goat and resign.’

Since then I’m waiting for her to make a mistake. Hope keeps a man alive.

 

( Which one is better friends. Feedback please.)

 

 

 

 

 

About Indira

I knew all along that life is about, love, compassion, compatibility and friendship, but now I have discovered that life is also about sharing the thoughts, encouraging others and getting encouraged. So here I am with my blogs about life, friendship, love, and whatever life has taught me.

31 responses »

  1. That’s a great last line. Nicely told.

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  2. Aw, this made me laugh. But I also feel a sense of loneliness for the stuffed goat. Sitting there all day every day not doing anything. 🙂

    Chris

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  3. I preferred the first one Indira. Both made me smile.

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  4. I, too, liked the first one best. Wonderful take on the prompt.

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  5. I like the first one, too. A good story.

    Lily

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  6. I like both in different ways. I love the poetic language an reflections on animism in the first one, though the second one is funny which is good in a different way. Can’t choose. Glad you shared both!

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  7. The first one has me smiling 🙂
    Ellespeth

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  8. Dear Indira,

    Hope springs eternal. I, too, like the first one best although they both made me smile.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

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  9. hahha..now that’s like a good optimistic goat

    Tina from The Sunny Side of Life

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  10. Lovely humor here.

    🙂

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  11. Dear Indira, I like them both – the second one had me laughing because he knows sooner or later, she will mess up again! Really very clever of you Indira, you are great! Nan 🙂

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  12. I’m not sure either of these is a very nice man-goat. I preferred the Hope version just because it read better to me. Both were a good and interesting take on the prompt.

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  13. Good read… the first one stands out 🙂

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  14. Indira, I also liked the first story best and thought they were both humorous. Well written. 🙂 —Susan

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  15. They are both well done — but I prefer “Optimism” — the point of view and perspective, as narrated by the Goat, is far stronger and interesting – and it provides a wonderful twist to the story. I think the voice is stronger – the lines and words you’ve written hold more depth and meaning, as well as offering something provocative – as in to think further upon – than a simple straightforwards story.

    “Do you believe in animism? I do. I have soul like plants, winds and mountains. I can’t speak but I can understand everything.”

    This is such a wonderfully descriptive and intriguing paragraph — it sets such a beautiful tone and pace to the story.

    As I’ve said, both are well done, but I think the money is really on this post “optimism.”

    Great job Indira 🙂

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