Friday Fiction hosted by Rochelle Wisoff
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Based on real incidence.
100 words
Coincident
I saw my neighbour in the bus merrymaking with bridegroom and the wedding guests. They were going to the bride’s residence for wedding ceremony.
‘What happened?’ I asked when I saw him coming back fuming.
‘I advised them not to drink in the bus but nobody listened to me and when I stopped them from giving it to the driver they kicked me out.’
After few hours we learned that the bus had drowned in the river due to the driver’s fault.
No one survived that accident except the one who was kicked out.
Was it a coincidence?
( This story is based on a real, very tragic incident . Bridegroom, his relatives and many friends died in it. That man was really kicked out.)
Sharing Thoughts 
Dear Indira,
What a horrible thing to happen. And I’ve no doubt it has happened.
English crit here ;):
2nd line I would put ‘the’ before ‘wedding ceremony’.
4th paragraph – After a few hours we learned (came to know is awkward in English…and you saved two words.)
No one survived that accident… no need for ‘in’ and ‘except’ not ‘accept’. (accept means ‘to receive’) Don’t worry, there are some words that I find confusing and English is my first language.
Sad coincidence indeed. But a good story.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks a lot Rochelle. So kind of you to correct my it. Now off to edit it.
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Oh that was a tragic incident.. what disaster, and sometimes it pays to do it right.
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Tragic indeed. I still can’t forget my friend.
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Tragic story indeed, but lucky for the person for being kicked out of the bus…he survived coz of that!
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Yes Rashmi. Thanks fr reading and commenting.
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So sad. Well written cautionary tale. Important to share this.
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It was very sad incident indeed. Thanks for your comment.
On Mon, Nov 9, 2015 at 9:02 AM, Indira's Blog wrote:
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This gives me goosebumps !
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Thanks for reading and comment.
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